I am here to critque one of my posts, The Jew who did his Share- Einstein. I have chosen it becuase I think it is an accurate biography of the life of Albert Einstein. I believe it was my best post because it has correct grammar and spelling, and it uses a picture.I worked a LONG time on it and am very proud of it. I think I could improve my posts in the future by reading it out loud before publishing it. A goal I want to achieve is getting 100 posts before the summer. Here is The Jew who did his Share :
You probally heard of Albert Einstein. He was the smartest man in the world, discovered E=Mc2………and a Jew!
Albert was born on March 14, 1879 in Wurrtenberg, Germany. When Little Albert was 6 weeks old, his family moved to Muinch. He started a Catholic school (they weren’t observant Jews) at age 5. When he was 8, he transferred to the Luitpold Gymnasium. He showed an intrest in mathmetics as a kid. When his family moved to Italy, Albert had to stay behind to finish school.
In 1902,Einstein and his future wife had a kid, who they gave to an orphanage. He married Mileva Maric in January 1903. Their two sons, Hans and Eduard, were born 6 years apart. They divorced in Febuary 1919. In June 1919, Einstein married Elsa Lowenthal, who died in 1936.
He was awarded a PhD from the Universty of Zurich on April 1905. Einstein was recognized as a leading scientist in 1908. He was also promoted lecturer at the University of Bern. He quit the job the same year to go to the University of Zurich. In 1919, a man confirmed facts that Einstein discovered, which made him famous. He got a Nobel Prize in 1922, and Einstein was awarded the Copley Medal in 1925.
He eimgrated to the U.S. as soon as Hitler came to power. When WWII started, Albert Einstein warned President Roosevelt that Germany might be making atomic bombs. Roosevelt put him in charge of the Manhattan Project, the one that created the atomic bomb.
Einstein took a job at the Institute of Advanced Study in Princeton, which he held until his death. In May 1933, the Nazis burned his books and works. He discovered he had a reward of death for $5,000 dollars, nowadays worth $90,000. When other scientists from Germany fled to America, he wrote “I have never felt so Jewish.” Einstein, with other immgrated scientists, warned the U.S. that Germany might build the atomic bomb, but the first time his warnings were ignored.
He became a American citizen in 1940. In 1952, David-Ben Gurion asked Einstein if he would like to become the Prime Minister of Israel. Albert refused, saying that he “lacked the apitude and experience to deal properly with people and to exercise offical functions.”
On April 17th, 1955, an internal organ inside Albert Einstein’s body exploded. He didn’t want to have surgery, saying that “ It is tasteless to prolong life artificially.” He also said that “I have done my share.” He was working on scientific papers the next morning when he died at 1 AM. He was cremated the same day, but scientists kept his brain in hopes of discovering what made him so smart.
One of the greatest people in the world was from a religon that was hurt the most. Just goes to show that it matters by how the personality is, not what color or what language they speak. What matters is how they act.